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Imagination by ~endofeternity:iconendofeternity:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open




Look into the mirror
See you staring back at me
Reach out to touch the glass
Your hand raises to meet mine

At the moment of contact

Your image fades and I’m left staring at all my scars
Faced with cold reality
And unforgiving thoughts

What if.

This tightness in my chest
Is just a fake feeling

What if.

All I’ve felt in the past,
Has been the biggest façade.

It’s all blurred together.

Streams of electricity, making my heart jump. Visual stimulants making my eyes dilate. Nervous clenching making my palms sweat. Inability to breathe making my lungs constrict.

It’s an automatic response.
I see it in the movies
I’ve read it in a book.

This is how you’re
Supposed
To feel

What if I’ve never really felt it
What if it’s all just been a lie

What if
What if
What if, I wonder

As I watch your reflection fade
As I feel my emotion drain
As it grinds to a halt.

What if?
©2005-2008 ~endofeternity
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I started this over a year ago when sitting with Cindy in the Park Student Union. I don't even know.

Constructive criticism, as usual, is always helpful.
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~hausfrau:iconhausfrau: Aug 6, 2005, 2:55:55 PM
I find this to be a very interesting piece and while reading it had me wondering about the timelessness of this. What I mean is....when I began reading it, I envisioned you as a young girl seeing your reflection as a young adult, and then at your current age seeing yourself at your current age, and ending with you as a middle aged adult seeing the reflection of your youth. Does this make sense?
Or perhaps, I've just laid out an idea for you to use for another time....hmmmmm.

Sometimes your words have me seeing my youth reflected in the computer screen. Another hmmmmm.

:hug: :heart:

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:sun: :flirty:
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I'm in my "Yellow Period" look for the spot of yellow in my work.
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:nod: :heart:: Aug 7
~imageek:iconimageek: Aug 6, 2005, 9:52:18 PM
all my responses have to do with how that reflectrs my life

but especially niow, im really trying to find myself, and i always wonder about the authenticity of these feelings, even of myself

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:pride:
"i steal music from the internet"
"wip: [link]
~endofeternity:iconendofeternity: Aug 8, 2005, 12:29:49 AM
it's rough. Internal reflection's a bitch.

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"And then I stabbed him in the eye with a pencil!"
~endofeternity:iconendofeternity: Aug 8, 2005, 12:31:11 AM
Definitely a new idea. When I get time, or inspiration, whatever comes first, I'll write. It'll be my new project.

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"And then I stabbed him in the eye with a pencil!"
~ImmortalSlayer:iconImmortalSlayer: Aug 8, 2005, 10:39:38 AM
Interesting thoughts. . . . . .what you believe, you are. Existance is only in your mind. Similar ideas have crossed my thoughts recently as well. This is a beautifully written piece, my only thoguht being that the lines beginning with "Streams of electricity," seem to be out of place. They're so long, compaired to the shortness of the rest of the poem. But I can also see how they fit in perfectly with the ideas presented. :hug: Lovely work, m'dear.

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~Obey-Me

I used to stand for something
Now I'm on my hands and knees
Traded my god in for this one
And he signs his name with a capital G
~imageek:iconimageek: Aug 8, 2005, 11:34:23 AM
even after doing that for months on end, in a plain rom, plain bed, im not used to it, nor am i comfortable with it yet

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:pride:
"i steal music from the internet"
"wip: [link]
~endofeternity:iconendofeternity: Aug 10, 2005, 8:46:19 PM
Thanks - I know what you mean about it seeming too long. The thing is, I was trying to use formatting to make the reader feel how it all happens. Ya know how it all happens at once, and it's such a rush that you can't really seperate one from the other? Maybe I should try smushing it all together (kindoflikethis) although that would make it really hard to read. Other than that, I don't know how to convey what I want.

Anyway, I will call you shortly. I only have two more minutes left for the month, so I can't call anyone for any reason unless I'm dying. <3 miss you.

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"And then I stabbed him in the eye with a pencil!"
~ImmortalSlayer:iconImmortalSlayer: Aug 11, 2005, 9:13:32 AM
Yeah, it didn't seem quite as bad when I went through and read it a second time. If you think about it and read it like you meant it to be read, it works out.

Ok, I'll be waiting for it I guess. :) Just don't call me between 6 and 8 (my time) on tuesdays starting next month. I'll be in class. :)

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~Obey-Me

I used to stand for something
Now I'm on my hands and knees
Traded my god in for this one
And he signs his name with a capital G
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